“My home is with you,” she whispered. “I won’t feel right if I’m not with you.” How much do I love the thought of her saying that to Cara instead of Richard? (AN AWFUL LOT).
Cara moved to stand by Richard, her face stoic and composed, but her fingers were twisting the ends of her hair. Props for using that mannerism!
Richard would have been convinced that she had ordered her body not to sweat in case it somehow slowed their journey. Bahahaha.
“Ducks now?”
They both turned to the little voice and to find the girl sitting swinging her legs back and forth on Kahlan’s throne.
“Ducks now,” Cara confirmed. PRECIOUS. I loved picturing that little exchange.
“...being a Mord’Sith allowed her to control her thoughts and feelings and now she can’t and it’s hurting her.” I really, really loved that the softer side of Cara is as much a source of immediate conflict as the harsher side. In the show, they basically said heart!Kahlan was missing her power and was a little ~off without her "logic" and that was that; most of the conflict came from head!Kahlan's actions. You really seized on the opportunity that Cara's past presented as a source of pain to a more vulnerable Cara.
The look of betrayal in Cara’s eyes when she realised that Kahlan’s hand was at her throat almost made her hesitate and Cara saying, “You promised me,” didn’t make it any easier. I think it was 1x10 that had Kahlan make a promise to Richard, then blatantly break that promise later in the episode because she judged it needed to be done. I loved the (maybe unintentional) mirror of that here. (How strange that I apparently consider breaking promises to be a positive character trait.)
This was a truly fantastic fic! Well written, good storytelling, great characterization, the whole deal. I really appreciated that you didn't shy away from the dark undertones that an untempered Mord-Sith Cara would so obviously present; it would have been noticeable, I feel, had you omitted them out of a desire not to offend. So, great choice and much respect.
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How much do I love the thought of her saying that to Cara instead of Richard? (AN AWFUL LOT).
Cara moved to stand by Richard, her face stoic and composed, but her fingers were twisting the ends of her hair.
Props for using that mannerism!
Richard would have been convinced that she had ordered her body not to sweat in case it somehow slowed their journey.
Bahahaha.
“Ducks now?”
They both turned to the little voice and to find the girl sitting swinging her legs back and forth on Kahlan’s throne.
“Ducks now,” Cara confirmed.
PRECIOUS. I loved picturing that little exchange.
“...being a Mord’Sith allowed her to control her thoughts and feelings and now she can’t and it’s hurting her.”
I really, really loved that the softer side of Cara is as much a source of immediate conflict as the harsher side. In the show, they basically said heart!Kahlan was missing her power and was a little ~off without her "logic" and that was that; most of the conflict came from head!Kahlan's actions. You really seized on the opportunity that Cara's past presented as a source of pain to a more vulnerable Cara.
The look of betrayal in Cara’s eyes when she realised that Kahlan’s hand was at her throat almost made her hesitate and Cara saying, “You promised me,” didn’t make it any easier.
I think it was 1x10 that had Kahlan make a promise to Richard, then blatantly break that promise later in the episode because she judged it needed to be done. I loved the (maybe unintentional) mirror of that here. (How strange that I apparently consider breaking promises to be a positive character trait.)
This was a truly fantastic fic! Well written, good storytelling, great characterization, the whole deal. I really appreciated that you didn't shy away from the dark undertones that an untempered Mord-Sith Cara would so obviously present; it would have been noticeable, I feel, had you omitted them out of a desire not to offend. So, great choice and much respect.
tl;dr: Loved it.